tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-594689579626985769.post5289304291122092860..comments2023-07-07T01:21:18.346-08:00Comments on Impudent Hatchlings: Baby It's Cold (AW Blog Chain)Hillary Jacqueshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10394482441040531244noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-594689579626985769.post-16112620371808646332010-09-23T03:45:59.784-08:002010-09-23T03:45:59.784-08:00I love the way you kept bringing back that initial...I love the way you kept bringing back that initial image, "like going to sleep and just never waking back up", with the jeans, her butt, her big toe. It really does a fantastic job of reinforcing the sense of insecurity/rejection/abandonment this girl feels. The sensory description highlights her character is so many ways. Very well written.Rebecca Laffar-Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18085299881243825229noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-594689579626985769.post-84099816834083623622010-09-11T05:55:24.840-08:002010-09-11T05:55:24.840-08:00I love your descriptive style. This is something ...I love your descriptive style. This is something I need to work on.Non Sequitur718https://www.blogger.com/profile/16961746086130798464noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-594689579626985769.post-53668639016129963622010-09-09T12:57:59.975-08:002010-09-09T12:57:59.975-08:00Sad piece. And now I want some tea. :) Thanks for ...Sad piece. And now I want some tea. :) Thanks for sharing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-594689579626985769.post-68797475503450417482010-09-09T11:15:03.951-08:002010-09-09T11:15:03.951-08:00claire - The universe apparently has opinions abou...claire - The universe apparently has opinions about these names staying together. Spooky.<br /><br />freshhell - This was special just for you guys...unless Maura decides she has other things to do.<br /><br />Sandra - My pleasure. Thanks for stopping by.<br /><br />Alex - It was intentional. Maura's been through a number of homes and families. Calling the Whitacres the "Whatevers" is a distancing mechanism that breaks down as she's drawn to them.Hillary Jacqueshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10394482441040531244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-594689579626985769.post-1667256087856029882010-09-09T10:38:51.702-08:002010-09-09T10:38:51.702-08:00Very enjoyable piece. I especially liked the unusu...Very enjoyable piece. I especially liked the unusual character names: Boy Whatever, Maura.<br /><br />I notice that the mother's name changes from "Whatever" to "Whitacre" in the last paragraph; is that intentional?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-594689579626985769.post-55266086661091495452010-09-09T09:31:25.901-08:002010-09-09T09:31:25.901-08:00Now my cold office feels even colder. ;) Time for ...Now my cold office feels even colder. ;) Time for some tea to warm up. Thanks for sharing this!Sandra Ulbrich Almazanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15365908651235829765noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-594689579626985769.post-37759298215244257792010-09-09T08:18:43.244-08:002010-09-09T08:18:43.244-08:00Ooh, I love this. That first pp is really powerful...Ooh, I love this. That first pp is really powerful. Is this something you came up with for the post or is it part of something longer? I'd love to read it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-594689579626985769.post-8866843322708849432010-09-09T04:24:08.945-08:002010-09-09T04:24:08.945-08:00Lovely piece...very evocative use of words and a s...Lovely piece...very evocative use of words and a strong picture of the season you chose. I did a double-take at your characters' names though because they rang so true--Chelsea was my first novel's MC and Maura was my latest flash fiction's MC.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com